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Dripping blood from open veins.
Is this love, or is this hate?
Will you survive or will you die?
Will you make it passed tonight?

Splattered love on the tile floor,
Craving blood and so much more.
You need to pull out all your lies.
Wanting to run yourself dry.

Inside it's numb, there's nothing.
You've let it out and, now coughing,
Lying almost lifeless seeming like last breaths.
Wondering if you'll ever live, or is this death?

You can't chase life anymore,
It's shoved you out your own door.
Weaker by the second you think,
"I will never rise, only sink".

So still in death you feel your anger,
This horrid feeling that was your danger.
But soon your eyes are not worth,
Opposing all you saw in birth.

What's the last thing that you see?
Pooling crimson all around down to your feet.
©2004-2009 ~DeathbyFire
:icondeathbyfire:

Author's Comments

I dunno, I guess I'm somewhat over my writer's block... Or maybe it's just the late night? *shrugs* Whatever it is, I'm glad I can write. Except... it rhymes... meh. Oh well. Enjoy

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:iconmxreverb:
great job. I can see that you are holding back though. Try to find whatevers blocking your potential and work around it, i look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future, and want it to be the best it can be ^_^ ok. cool. i'll ttyl, bub bye +fav
:icondark3clipse:
very good ^_^

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When all of heaven and earth was blue- of a demon in my view
-ashley
:icondeathbyfire:
Well, I'm just getting over a writer's block, that could be what's "holding me back" but thanx for the advice.
-It's nice to see you back on DA. Hope you're doing okay. And thanx for the fav! :hug:

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~Quoth the raven, "Nevermore."~
:iconwindburned:
yeah i understand this poem. good job! :+fav:

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"Art does not depict exactly what the artist sees, but it is a picture of the psyche of the artist as he perceives the world around him." -Tim Hinck
:icondeathbyfire:
YAY!! Ty for the fav!!! *feels special* ^^; :hug:

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~Quoth the raven, "Nevermore."~
:iconhidden8707:
Wow... I mean, like... um, wow. lol That is an absolutely amazing piece.

Favorite lines:
"So still in death you feel your anger,
This horrid feeling that was your danger"

A-friggin'-mazing. This is beautiful work :thumbsup:

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Don't think of dying. That bridge hasn't been built for us yet. :meditation:
:icondeathbyfire:
Thanx so much ^.^ :blackrose:

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~Quoth the raven, "Nevermore."~
:icono0tron0o:
:thumbsup: very nice.....:clap: u are ur worst enemy....lol....
:iconhidden8707:
Not a problem :D

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Don't think of dying. That bridge hasn't been built for us yet. :meditation:

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